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maebellelovemiaDay dreaming is my hobby
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A girl who are very confuse ,sounds crazy but it's true,she often alone,just wondering what would her life would be when she's old....

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Confusing life

This life that's hard to explain Many ask ,what I want? I don't know is what I say.... Lot of things I want to do, Like a roller coaster keeps spinning in this head...

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sydneyVerifiedco-creator of Commaful
a year agoReply
@maebellelovemia Hey :) you asked for some feedback and suggestions, so here are my thoughts. feel free to let me know if you have more questions by tagging @sydney any time! Some initial thoughts on the formatting: ---------------------------------------------------------- First, you should add a title on the first slide (so that it won't say "Type Title Hee" as the title of your poem or story. It also looks like you have a blank slide to end. Feel free to leave slides empty, but you'll want to add something interesting if it's going to be an empty slide. If you want to add more slides, you can split the poem into more slides and use images to support or amplify the message you want to share Words and Content: ---------------------------------------------------------- The content of the poem I like. I like the message you share and the roller coaster metaphor, though cliche, is a very good and true one. If you wanted to expand on things more, I think you could carry the reader through the hardships and questions of life

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a year agoReply
Welcome 😀 looks like there are a couple of empty slides here haha. But really cool poem!