troubles
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valerieBreathe. You're alive.
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This is a piece I have always been very proud of. There is so much more under the surface of simplicity in this piece. The protagonist is speaking to someone but their responses are not included, leaving it open for interpretation. Each section touches on what is troubling the protagonist, whether it be desires unfulfilled or the contemplation of bringing it all to an end. Though something like small talk would never reveal such troubles.

troubles

by valerie

troubled mind with great aspirations

“Hey there, my name is Valerie.”

troubled heart with pure intentions

“That's a very beautiful name.”

troubled minds just need a break

“Yeah I write, it’s just a hobby.”

troubled hearts just silently ache

“That’s nice, I wish I knew how to play an instrument.”

troubled minds will contemplate

“I just never make the time.”

troubled hearts will hesitate

“Yeah I should get going too.”

troubled minds see what is coming

“Ok well it was nice meeting you.”

troubled hearts wait until it’s too late

“Goodbye.”

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This is well thought out and the execution is excellent. Great post!!