Hold On
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tabnash24
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Never give up! ;)

Hold On

by tabnash24

The day is soon to come,

where I'll hear greetings from mum.

Singing me songs of Birthday,

which is supposed to bring me joy that day.

People ask me, "What would you want?"

I reply, "Nothing at all."

Later alone in the night, I wished for something,

which seems impossible than anything.

There a tear rolls down my cheek,

making my body feel weak.

Sighing I doze off to sleep,

for I can't dig anymore deep.

Once again a year needs to go on,

for that wish still tells me to 'Hold On!'

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tabnash24Silver CommaYou'll know me as you read ;)
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil ohh, never realized that. Thanks for letting me know, I'll remember that ^^

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
Great job setting up the mystery to come a year from now. Your prose is deep and haunting. The rhyming is charmingly appropriate. I think you should work on the meter. Read it aloud to yourself. There should be an equal amount of syllables in each line of the verse. I use my fingers to count the meter while I am silently lip synching. Paying attention to little things like the meter will make good poetry great poetry.