1. Does it "flow"? (piece analysis)

                1. Does it "flow"?

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1. Does it "flow"? (piece analysis)


Hello! I thought it would be interesting to talk about flow

Many prominent film editors, seem to agree on the fact that flow and emotion trumps everything else.

it seems that some of them would give flow about 60 or 70% of the decision power when it comes to editing.

I think that one of the reasons why flow is so important, is because humans are "moving creatures"

We react positively to events and objects which facilitate our movement forward,

And we get very angry when anything or anyone steps on our way...

What does this mean for your story?

That, at the very least, your story should flow well from beginning to end.

That way we avoid the "obstacle effect" and our reader does not end up like this:

Many things can be said about flow when it comes to a Commaful Story

Many things can be said about flow when it comes to a Commaful Story (C-Story)

One thing that applies to both films and C-Stories is something called: "foreshadowing"

I'll use my story to show you one way in which foreshadowing can be done:

If you haven't seen my story, here is a warning: It's about to be spoiled.

Title slide:

Title slide: notice where I placed the words

-----> Title slide: notice where I placed the words

-----> lately, I tend to always include this black slide after my title

-----> That in itself is a form of foreshadowing

-----> lt's also well within the limits of what most would expect.

-----> Notice that the next slide also has text placed on TOP

-----> (That's where most eyes would still be hovering over,)

-----> this means that less energy is needed by the reader

-----> to consume this story!

-----> to consume this story! and your mind likes that.

-----> Black once more so that you are assured (seen it before)

-----> and to compartmentalize the story into separate parts

New background image,

New background image, new words

New background image, new words...SAME position

-----> New background image, new words...SAME position

-----> the text is purposely short and easy to read

-----> Since you are well "seated" I give you more information

-----> Notice that I did not use a full-stop here

-----> Instead, I move to the next slide but keep it "blank",

-----> and then I show you a new style of word placement

-----> Still on the TOP and slowly moving down

-----> I cropped the image so the text would not overlap

-----> and I end the stanza on black; which you are familiar with:

-----> from the first part

To Summarize: The story begins at the very top and uses that position to give the reader an "anchor" that can be used to safely explore every other change

Now, for the good stuff, comes the third and last part of the story.

In this case, I made a GIF running at 2X the speed so we can go over it together:

(If you see THIS orange bar, the GIF is playing)

I'll interject still images and then go back to the same gif

I hope it's not TOO confusing!

I hope it's not TOO confusing! Let's start:

The text starts at the top;


I show you THREE stages of how the victim looks

One from far away

a zoomed in version to make you feel as the shooter

An equally sized target but blurred to let you know

what is about to happen


When I show you the gun I use very little text

and I place it right above the barrel because,

that is where I want your eyes to be

(Your eyes will want to go to the face of the character)


Because you already saw this part of the image before

this one is fairly easy to grasp (almost immediately)

it has a lot of empty space.


...notice the foreshadow of the feathers:

feathers ---->



As you can see, the first 2 parts increase slowly in their complexity, before everything goes a bit crazy

Try to think about these two elements as variables: 1. word placement 2. background

Make sure you don't change those two elements at the SAME time from slide to slide to avoid the "obstacle effect"

Think about your favorite songs and pay attention to how the instruments play the role of "anchor"

For example, drums are often used to keep the tempo and speed of a song.

That's it, hope this helps.

That's it, hope this helps. All you need to do is keep an eye on these things.

That's it, hope this helps. All you need to do is keep an eye on these things. You'll pick it up as you pay attention to the format.


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