Child of Independence
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lbingamenNo boundaries
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Loving someone too young. Growing up and struggling for independence while trying to grow with someone and commit. A hazy inexperienced love.

Child of Independence

by lbingamen

I am a child with Independence trapped in a one last dance

And I twirl and reminisce in dreams when we had a chance

We could have owned a piece of the world you and I

But our daydreams are divided and dizzied from our heads to our eyes

I know I love you but I don't know what love is

I'm just a child given a heart that I don't know what to do with

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bernardtwindwilGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
8 months agoReply
@lbingamen Thank you for the background. I knew there was a great depth here and nuances of which I was unclear. There are almost 60 years between us yet this sounds like something I might have written. Independence, when I was a teenager ran from staying out as long as I wanted, climbing Everest, or maybe a toboggan trip in Antarctica. There were no boundaries. Nothing was impossible. The "deep and everlasting loves" seldom lasted for more than a month. But I kept trying. You are a very talented writer. I love your works. Enjoy life the first time around. I am beginning to suspect that I will not be given a second oppportunity.

lbingamenNo boundaries
8 months agoReply
@bernardtwindwil Well for instance I use the word child because thats kind of how I seem myself. Very emotionally immature, and tending to have a child-like point of view. Also because being a teenager is also still not completely seen as being an adult. I basically wanted to describe being young and naive still, due to inexperience, yet trying to commit to something as serious as love. Being a teenager, you're trying to find your "independence". Between finding who you are and what you like, and basically asserting yourself in this world. Yet in love, for me personally, it was very consuming. It was like having no independence, being one with someone else. Basically its hard to grow up in love. It clashes. Its confusing. Its new and something unknown at this age. I found myself so infatuated; losing myself in the dreams of that love.

bernardtwindwilGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
8 months agoReply
This was an interesting take. I noticed non-sequiturs. Were these used to represent confusion? How young is too young? These are just questions I have in my mind. Your writing was lyrical. The message is a little myopic. There is also some confusion in your definitions. Take a word like "independence" for me, it would mean dressing myself and the freedom to move around my house. For you...? Good post!