Hopes
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Hopes

by fizzanaseem

Like the cute little girl looking at the moon

In the same adoring way I am looking at you!

Moon is so high and she is so low

And moon is just walking with a careless smooth flow

With the every inch of distance that the moon covers

She gets her beats faster as if she's losing her lover

And when she observes so much distance in between

She leaves with broken heart finding it the only workable scheme

She cries hard because she's lost her moon in rain

Then there comes a hope that the Moon will come again

I live my life in same way as she is having her shine

With the hope of a rise again when my moon will be mine..

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sydneyVerifiedco-creator of Commaful
a year agoReply
@fizzanaseem I'm really glad :) :) Let me know if you have any thoughts or feedback!

fizzanaseemversatile!
a year agoReply
@sydney Thank you so much! Commaful is cool because at least people respond here without a wish to get a new follower <3 I am loving it

sydneyVerifiedco-creator of Commaful
a year agoReply
Aww this is wonderful!! ❤️❤️

fizzanaseemversatile!
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil Thank You so much :) Your words really really mean a lot to me :) One of the best comments I have ever had!

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
The rhythm to this poem is just down right contagious. It is not only the rhyme and syllable count, it is the words you chose to provide a lyrical satisfaction. You delivered your message with panache. The theme is so universal that it will resonate with anyone. This was a spectacular effort. Great job.