Weakened by Words
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dannibear1461Mum, Novice at poetry
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Weakened by Words

by dannibear1461

You've torn me down Thrown me around Your words have destroyed All my joy

My illusions shattered All my heart scattered Pieces in the air Left in despair

Strong demure Just a caracature I remain the same Just drained

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dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
5 months ago
Kaleidoscope

dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
a year ago
Trust in me ...

dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
8 months ago
Cold...



dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil it is apsalutly fine, honestly!! Like I've said this is all new to me and yes my dream is to have it in print so people will want to genuinely read my poetry not just a few that appreciate its worth , thank you :)

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
@dannibear1461 I agree with you in the replacement of "She" with "I". It does bring it home. I apologize for taking you to task. I have very high regsard for you poetry and the person who shines through.

dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil I have faith in myself... Thank you for your belief in me to. Job done , always room for improvement tho and any constructive critisism is welcome to improve and develop :)

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
@dannibear1461 So edit it. I really wish you would stop denigrating yourself. And second guessing yourself. I believe in you so much that when you ding yourself. It makes me upset. Who do you think you are to question my excellent judgement? If I have faith in you, you should have faith in you.

dannibear1461Bronze CommaMum, Novice at poetry
a year agoReply
@bob @bernardtwindwil thank you for your comments again on this one, short but to the point and would have had more meaning using i instead of she so it followed in the same context :(

bobBronze CommaAll hail BOB
a year agoReply
welllll done again!!! thank you for sharing this!!

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
Oh hell yeah, girl!!! This poetic architecture you have is stellar. The stanzas are deeply meaningful taken on their own. As a complete poem, they are a lesson for life.