falling
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chloeblue2ᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
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late night thoughts on love stolen by "friends"

falling

by chloeblue2

i'm high but i'm falling

and i thought i'd be alright fuck why can't i get it right?

but no matter what i say every night and every day

it never makes you happy

so why shouldn't i be happy?

i'm telling you i've done everything that you've asked

so why, oh please, tell me dear does that makes me an ass?

your words are twisting and they're turning and it's getting me confused

your attitude's so bitter it's likely you'll give me a bruise

you gave me hard blows with your proverbial blows

then you gave me a high brighter than a metaphorical sky

but now i'm falling

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chloeblue2Bronze Commaᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
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chloeblue2Bronze Commaᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
a year ago
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chloeblue2Bronze Commaᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
a year ago
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chloeblue2Bronze Commaᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil I appreciate the advice, thank you!

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
I think this is an excellent poem. It is quite lyrical. I think there are some word choices you made that are more suited to poetry than music. For example: "you gave me hard blows with your proverbial blows" The repeating word "blows" might be reworked for the better.

chloeblue2Bronze Commaᶜʰˡᵒᵉ/Ιל/ᵉᶰᶠᵖ/ˢˡᵉᵉᵖ ᵈᵉᵖʳᶤᵛᵉᵈ
a year agoReply
@tango Thank you! It's actually the lyrics of a song I wrote.

tangoBronze Commalet's TANGO!!!
a year agoReply
I love this