A Detonation of Self-Importance

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how can the selfishness of suicide
be seen as sacrifice?
((there are no brownie points
six feet under))

A Detonation of Self-Importance

by Caroline Prank

Do I have to be good to die young?

Heroics sitting in your stomach, like a suicide pact. How about the few things you live for, you learn to take back. Without losing limbs just to prove you had something worth losing at all.

Hands like grenades, we're pulling all the pins.

Making sparks fly, like suicidal butterflies. Fluttering down to start a scene, with the sense that, for once, this won't wake up, a dream.

It seems all we have is trouble, a constant monologue of

"kill me". A systematic desensitization of the word "please", because begging is enough, when there is light in your eyes, enough to see the blown out pupils in mine.


we've heard it enough; we've heard it too much, that we can't even register its meaning. It's just another feeling, desperation.

We resuscitate our respiration, till comes time for the trepidation of detonation. A dedication to this damn nation. Our perspiration fuels for confrontation. Gone are the days of hesitation.

The damnation is evident, in the state of our affairs,

so if I die now, I can guarantee the last things, these lips will see, will be two lines short of my first prayer.

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@bernardtwindwil Thank you! I worked really hard to make that stanza work, so I am extremely happy that you like it!

a year agoReply
@shana Thank you!

bernardtwindwilGold CommaGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
a year agoReply
One thing I really like is the alliteration in that one stanza. It brought lyricism to the entire poem in an up tempo way. The message to me, came across as a cry in every sense of the word. I loved it. Great poem!!!!

shanaCommabassadorCommunity member
a year agoReply
this is so amazing!!