As I lay dying
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bernardtwindwilGranddad & story teller, tomthepo8.com
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2 yrs ago after heart surgery, this is what i experienced

As I lay dying

by bernardtwindwil

Like a miasma in the gray The window moved A cacophony of chatter assaulted me I struggled to understand

Germanic, Romance, Asian maybe Asian Lao-Thai? consciousness faltered was I finally understanding? Stop! Please stop let me rest I'll be OK Is this the other side? No, I can move.

I need to go home. Which way? How? Can't lay here. Get up. You can...what? Someone close talking. I've been captured. I have to run. Where are my legs?

Quieter. They're gone Now go now I'm so dry and thirsty. Someone said no. I'm miserable what I can feel hurts Footsteps. Now! I roll toward the sound. Rough hand pushes back. I can whip him.

My brain is getting clearer No maybe Swimming floating Try to think Nothing I float out into the night sky Stars above and below me I spin

It's her hand on mine. She will save me. I must be home now. It's her voice clearing the fog drawing me back from where? where was I? Someone else tells me to breathe Why? Take me home.

"Don't die. Come back" It's her "Wasn't in my plans for today." it's me I can talk "Where the hell am I?" Life is good. I can smile "I never knew how tough you were." It's her.

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AteefahWriter and poet.
10 months agoReply
This is so deep. It triggers my memory of when I had an operation a few years ago. Coming back to consciousness was filled with pain, blurred vision and tears. I wish you a happy contented life :)

a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil I wish you a long life filled with happiness , health and love , the world needs a wonderful person like you

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a year agoReply
@ameagami Thank you, I am prepared to die but I am not yet ready. My family and people like you keep me functioning.

a year agoReply
It must've been very hard , I'm so glad you're all better now .... Your writing skills are very Impressive, every time I read your poems I feel like I'm watching them .. I wish you all the happiness and health in the world

tabnash24Silver CommaYou'll know me as you read ;)
a year agoReply
@bernardtwindwil I'm happy that you liked me calling you that. ^^ I think I'm just a bit worried about receiving comments again like, "You must have copied from somewhere." Well I don't know but it kinda worries me now because even my own people said so and that's exactly the reason, I used to hide my poems even from grandpa, just in case sacred if he'd say the same or something.

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a year agoReply
@tabnash24 "grandy", I am honored and you have touched my heart. Originality? 440 million years of life on this planet. 4 million years of hominid life. Nine billion souls alive on Earth today. I sincerely doubt that any claim to be had for originality.

tabnash24Silver CommaYou'll know me as you read ;)
a year agoReply
The way you wrote this, literally took me to a place where I could exactly imagine the scene of you experiencing it all. It was captivating but really loved it! Certainly, I wanna admit that every time you leave a remark on my works, I get encouraged just like how I used to when my late grandpa did for whatever new I tried. He was my only best friend I had but couldn't show him my works cz of the fear being called unoriginal by him too so just kinda concerned. I hope you're well now, grandy! (If only you don't mind me calling you that) :) <3

sydneyVerifiedco-creator of Commaful
a year agoReply
Wow. Amazing post Bernard. You captured a really crazy experience