I've noticed lots of posts here go unanswered, but not many authors ask for feedback in the submissions either. I will gladly give my feedback to anyone who wants it if you post your story here.
I work at a University Writing Center, where I talk to students about their writing. It's a slow day today, so I figured I could help some of you out instead.
Please tell me what kinds of things you want me to look for. Sentence structure? Overall idea? Just generally anything I see?